Thursday, February 2, 2012
THE COUNTRY OF PANEM
So this is how it is? This is what our world is turning into? I can’t belive this is how it will end. Everybody in the world even citzens fighting for their own freedom from these animals takeing us every second. They could take us out with one nuclear bomb in every country, which they have the aircrafts to do so. Thats all it takes, i say to myself. Then thats when a big bomb hits us and we are all thrown back down this small hillside. We have been trying to get past this hillside for about an hour now, but they keep hiting us with bombs every time we try to go up it. We stop trying to go up it. Most or at least half of our men are wounded or dead. We have a lot of hospitals all around us for the wounded. The dead is carried to a graveyard about a mile away from here. Once the bombing stops we wait for a second and then run up the hillside to try again. This time we made it and we run down the other side to see the village here is completely distroyed. Includeing the Hospital. Not even half of the village is still alive. “We will stay and help for a bit but we have to keep movieng when we are done”. Says my commander. So we stay for a bit, but once the hospital is back up and running we move on to ur quest to get to the other villages around in this country of North Carolina, but now its called “District 14” thanks to china.. You see when china stoped sending or selling resources to every other state or country but theirs. It started a war. A war that will never be forgotten. After that day they sayed that, we all planed to take them down, but they did something even worse they send over 2 millon of their units in their army here to make us into one big country called “Panem”. The really bad thing is that we had to kill ourselfs to stay alive. The only down fall to that is they didn’t have much of an army when they had a huge meeting that day, so we took all the people that were watching us down and went right to the building they had the meeting at and burned it down. Most of them made it out and told the china capital what we were doing and got them out of here and started bombing us everywhere. That was 3 years ago though. Now days its either you fight or die. I chose to fight mostly because i hate the china Capital. And i plan on killing the man in charge there for killing my whole family. I will make sure he pays big time for that. THIS IS TO BE CONTINUED.
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Awesome idea for a writing piece. This even has the Hunger Games feel to it, with your own twist, of course. I especially like how you sort of jump around in it time....with your character starting to talk about the present, then the past, then the present. That's tough to do, but you really make it work well. I wonder what's going to happen next? How your character will seek out vengance.....
ReplyDeleteOk, I'm back and reading it again....just couldn't resist. Anyway, reading it the second time through, I'm admiring how you are telling the story while also giving the reader pieces of information to piece the background story together. You don't give me too much, just enough to make the story make sense...and that's tough to do as a writer. Cool.
DeleteAlso, lets talk sometime about paragraphs. I think you'll like what they can do to your writing.
That was a great story and I can't wait to see the rest of it,& keep up the good work :)
ReplyDeleteG'day Colton,
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G'day Colton, I have really enjoyed the story written above, please continue it and post it! :)
ReplyDeleteI have liked the story please do continue it.
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